A World Without You
In a world without you
I couldn't help but weep.
Weep and weep.
Cry and cry.
In a world without you
I couldn't help but think.
Think about you.
At all times.
At all hours.
In a world without you
I couldn't help but worry.
That you would never come.
Never ever ever.
In a world without you
I couldn't help but weep.
Weep and weep.
Cry and cry.
In a world without you
I couldn't help but think.
Think about you.
At all times.
At all hours.
In a world without you
I couldn't help but worry.
That you would never come.
Never ever ever.
Please inform me of your opinion of the poem. Although I do not fear a bit of constructive criticism, please be gentle and forgiving. This is my first original poem.

5 comments:
It is a wonderful poem. Very simple structure, yet very powerful. By the way, my favorite flower is roses. Have a nice evening.
Ella
it's good for your first poem. keep writing.
Good poem! Keep reading Destiny's poems as well! Hers are great and you can probably learn a lot by reading them.
destiny's poems are AMAZING!
for ur first poem, thats really good!! my first poems really sucked!!! <=]
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